WHAT’S THE CATCH?

Just Joan features yet another new form this week.  This one is rather gimmicky, and as such, presented a colossal challenge.  Read the poem slowly and carefully.  See if you can figure out what is special about it.

AFTERNOON NAPS

Spent, pate to toe,
far past espresso,
of a state apropos
for a nap

Afternoon frees one
to tap open season,
to reap for no reason
a nap

Star operator
of a potent sonar
senses fortress not far
for a nap

Sofas possess
apt erasers of stress
or so patrons attest:
Naps, naps, naps!

No opposer, no foe,
no trespasser – presto!
A safe spot for repose,
for a nap

A soft, serene nest
for a soporate rest,
or a profane snore-fest,
for a nap

Naps appease, naps sate
Naps restore, naps penetrate
Naps ease a tense state
Naps rate!

So snare a transport
free of fare, sans passport
to a far-off resort:
Port O’Nap

 

Give up?  “Afternoon Naps” is an ANAGRAMMATIC poem.  In this form, all of the words in the poem are constructed from a given set of letters, in this case, those in the poem’s title.  I allowed myself unlimited use of the sanctioned letters in each word, but no other leeway.  Point of the exercise?  Cutting out two-thirds of the alphabet might slow a poet down, but it will not stop her.  Somehow, she will still find a way.

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25 thoughts on “WHAT’S THE CATCH?

      • Just Joan April 2, 2017 / 10:59 am

        Thanks, Joyce. Hope you get a nap today, if you want one. 🙂

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    • Just Joan April 2, 2017 / 11:07 am

      It was a challenge, Lyart, one of the hardest poems I’ve ever written. Thanks for noticing. I had originally tried to write a poem using the letters from a New York Times anagram puzzle: E I M R T X Y. LOL, that was just not happening. 🙂

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  1. T. Wayne April 2, 2017 / 11:41 am

    Wow, Joan. I sort of figured that the letters used in some of the words were taken from somewhere; I was thinking the lines above where the word was used. My perspective was too limited I guess.

    Writing something like that couldn’t be easy, but you definitely pulled it off. In about a couple hours, I’ll probably take that afternoon nap…

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    • Just Joan April 2, 2017 / 12:33 pm

      It got you thinking, though. My hope was that the poem would be so seamlessly crafted you all wouldn’t realize there WAS a catch. Anyway, T Wayne, enjoy your Sunday nap. Will it be a soporate rest or a profane snore-fest? My dog prefers option 2. LOL. 🙂

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      • T. Wayne April 2, 2017 / 5:12 pm

        Unfortunately, had to pass on that afternoon nap. But if I did take it, it more than likely would have been Option 2.

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    • Just Joan April 2, 2017 / 2:17 pm

      My command of the tedious? I love it, Marissa. There is no form so exacting that I will not attempt it. I puzzled over this one for a week and it nearly did drive me insane, but I rewarded myself afterward with a glorious NAP. 🙂

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  2. LiteraryFuzz April 2, 2017 / 4:12 pm

    What an incredibly difficult challenge. And of course, very well executed, Joan. Lovely poem, I can’t imagine how much time you put into it!

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    • Just Joan April 2, 2017 / 4:43 pm

      Thanks, Jordan. I like exercises that make me stretch, employ creativity, think outside the box. Bonus: I learned a few new words as I searched the thesaurus for alternatives. Thanks for coming by, can’t wait to see what’s next on Literary Fuzz. 🙂

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  3. Peter Klopp April 2, 2017 / 4:49 pm

    An appeasing song of praise especially composed for me, the afternoon napper!

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    • Just Joan April 2, 2017 / 8:09 pm

      Then you know exactly what I’m talking about, Peter. Afternoon naps are amazing. 🙂

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      • Peter Klopp April 2, 2017 / 9:35 pm

        I have one every afternoon. A ten minute nap is all I need. Haha!

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  4. circumstance227 April 3, 2017 / 5:28 pm

    As you know, I sometimes try out the new forms of poetry you introduce here. This one has stumped me so far – but there may be one coming! Wait for it!
    (And thanks – again – for all the wonderful creative inputs – from me AND my students!)

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    • Just Joan April 3, 2017 / 5:55 pm

      You’re quite welcome, 227! I think this one was the most difficult form I’ve done yet, because so many “connector” words are off-limits. I considered allowing a “handicap” (a certain number of banned letters, or the use of an apostrophes, like o’er for over and ‘n for and) but was ultimately able to get by without either. I have no doubt you can do this if you put your mind to it and chew on it long enough. Please share, I would totally enjoy reading it. 🙂

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  5. L. T. Garvin, Author April 4, 2017 / 3:05 pm

    Oh wow indeed! Excellent, Joan. I’ve never seen one of those. I love the cadence of it. I am also really fond of naps. You are so amazing! 😀

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    • Just Joan April 4, 2017 / 3:47 pm

      Thanks, Lana. I chose to make it rhyme just to raise the bar a bit. Also because use of the same letters is very conducive to rhyming, which (I think) effectively conceals the gimmick. A friend read this and suggested I read ELLA MINNOW PEA by Mark Dunn. It’s about a turn of events in a small fictional community that causes the population to have to speak and write using progressively fewer letters of the alphabet, and the hilarious difficulties that ensue. Lots of great words to expand the ol’ vocabulary. I think you’d love it. 🙂

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      • L. T. Garvin, Author April 4, 2017 / 11:01 pm

        It was really skillfully done and super cool, Joan. I enjoyed it. I will defintely check out Ella Minnow Pea! It sounds like so much fun. I do work on using less wording, especially in poetry, it really is an important part to use the right words and quite sparingly. This is an ongoing challenge. I love anything too that expands the old vocab, helps in my English teaching and adding new poetic words 😀

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  6. chevvy8 April 9, 2017 / 12:36 pm

    A brilliant response to the challenge you set yourself Joan. I bet there is a great deal of satisfaction in completing such a challenge – hopefully as satisfying as a good nap!😀

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    • Just Joan April 9, 2017 / 1:03 pm

      Chevvy, it made me feel like a gymnast who has flipped her way through a complicated routine and landed solidly on her feet. Although the limits of this often made me want to pull my hair out, it did force me to come up with creative ways to say what I wanted to say. “Snore-fest” was my favorite. Thanks for the visit and comment, my friend. 🙂

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      • chevvy8 April 9, 2017 / 1:04 pm

        My pleasure my dear!

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  7. murisopsis June 23, 2020 / 11:41 pm

    Hehe! Just like a real poet to bend the rules!! I love how this one reads – I need to find a word that allows for the words “and” and “the”.

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