NOTHING TO LOSE, EVERYTHING TO GAIN

In a MONOTETRA, each stanza is comprised of four rhymed lines.  Each line has four metrical feet, a total of eight syllables.  What makes it such a powerful form is that the closing line of each stanza is four syllables, repeated.  A Monotetra can have as few or as many stanzas as desired.  C’mon, sink your teeth into one!  They’re the greatest.  You’ll love ’em.

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TEMPTATION

On Sunday mornings, I escape
to wait in line with jaws agape
and scope the sugary landscape
of rounded shapes, of rounded shapes

From the case, glazed bodies gleam
filled with jelly, filled with cream
and twisted cinnamon daydreams
Their silent screams, their silent screams

penetrate my helpless brain
and though resistance I might feign
my diet’s headed down the drain
‘cause donuts reign, ‘cause donuts reign

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32 thoughts on “NOTHING TO LOSE, EVERYTHING TO GAIN

  1. T. Wayne March 12, 2017 / 1:09 am

    Ahh donuts! Love the Krispy Kreme glazed. They are a weakness for sure.

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    • Just Joan March 12, 2017 / 8:33 am

      Thanks, T Wayne. I never met a donut (any kind) I didn’t like. 🙂

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  2. chevvy8 March 12, 2017 / 3:44 am

    Lovely – Joan. I would certainly like to sink my teeth into this kind of poem. Enjoy your Sunday!

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    • Just Joan March 12, 2017 / 8:36 am

      Thanks, Chevvy. Now you know what I do on Sunday mornings! One more form to try when you’re feeling froggy. Or donutty. 🙂

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      • chevvy8 March 12, 2017 / 10:29 am

        Yes – one day. Hope you are having a good Sunday my friend 😊

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  3. Joyce Robinson March 12, 2017 / 9:55 am

    I like this one Joan.

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    • Just Joan March 12, 2017 / 2:47 pm

      Close enough. Nothing like a good, nutritious breakfast to start the morning… 🙂

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    • Just Joan March 12, 2017 / 2:48 pm

      Thanks for the shout-out, Lennon! Hope your Sunday is filled with peace, good tunes, and (of course) donuts. 🙂

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  4. Peter Klopp March 12, 2017 / 6:58 pm

    Just Joan

    When I reflect I must not moan.
    For Joan excels with words alone,
    Describing words in verse and tone,
    I think of Joan, I think of Joan.

    Greetings from Canada, Joan!

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    • Just Joan March 12, 2017 / 8:53 pm

      Thanks, Peter! It is the most gratifying feeling to receive response poetry from my readers. It totally rocks to know that I’ve not only gotten people all over the world to READ poetry, but also to WRITE it. You have put a 🙂 on my face!

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      • Peter Klopp March 13, 2017 / 1:15 pm

        I happy to read that you like my little contribution to your poetry blog. I also know about the positive aspect of finding genuine recognition from friends in cyberspace. Have a great week ahead!

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    • Just Joan March 14, 2017 / 4:12 pm

      You’re most welcome, Conrad! It’s the least I can do to repay you for your consummate hosting and dozens of loaves of raisin bread. Thanks for reading.
      PS: When I run out of new forms, I’ll just start making up my own. 🙂

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    • Just Joan March 15, 2017 / 11:22 am

      Thanks, Lana. Poem inspired by the real-life donut case I stand in front of every Sunday, (im)patiently waiting my turn. Gosh, is it only Wednesday? 🙂

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    • Just Joan May 13, 2018 / 10:14 am

      Like you, I write in many different forms. I try to always put the form name on the post so it will pop up on a search. You can search my site, using the little magnifying glass at the top of the page, to see if I’ve written anything in a particular form. Other poets I know have told me it is unusual to do this, most of them pick a form (usually free verse, but one gal writes a lot of sonnets and villanelles) and stick with it. I think the variety is more fun, and the challenge of successfully executing a new form. Sounds like you do, too. 🙂

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      • Anacrazyfuturewriter May 13, 2018 / 10:16 am

        I sure do love writing in a variety of different styles! Perhaps we could be ‘linking’ buddies if you will, wherein if we find the other has written in a particular form we link our own poem in that form. What do you think?

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      • Just Joan May 13, 2018 / 10:29 am

        Not sure I know how to do that… usually I just leave a link in the comments so you and your readers can click on it if they want.

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      • Anacrazyfuturewriter May 13, 2018 / 10:30 am

        Yeah that’s what I meant… For instance, just now, I loved your ‘Cinquain’, and I linked my own so that I could get your brilliant tips.

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      • Just Joan May 13, 2018 / 10:53 am

        Cool. I’m hip to doing that. I don’t get to my Reader every day, though. I usually post on Sundays and am here for a while answering comments and seeing what’s new. This week’s poem is a triolet series about dementia and caregivers: https://justjoan42.wordpress.com/2018/05/13/when-the-gears-start-slipping/. I was a nurse for 24 years before I started writing poetry. I loved Harry Potter, too. I’m a very nervous public speaker. I like playing Scrabble and watching any kind of detective or police show so I can try and figure out who did it. 🙂

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      • Anacrazyfuturewriter May 13, 2018 / 10:57 am

        Of course I understand, I’m not always around either. But I think we could both benefit from this mutual “alliance” of sorts :).

        OMG fellow Potterhead!! You should check out my ‘Clerihew’ on Draco Malfoy (https://poeticaparadisum.wordpress.com/2018/05/11/down-draco-clerihew/). It’s really short and I think you’d really like it.

        And about your public speaking, you should try a Toastmasters club if it’s available in your district. It has really helped me overcome my fear of public speaking.

        I love watching detective shows as well! Have you watched Sherlock? Benedict Cumberbatch plays an amazing Holmes.

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      • Just Joan May 13, 2018 / 11:08 am

        I watch both versions of Sherlock, the American one and the BBC. Criminal Minds, The Mentalist, The BlackList, Chicago PD, Blue Bloods, NCIS, etc. I do poetry readings for my poetry group and occasionally in larger venues, which has helped my nervousness a little. My poem First Open Mike (https://justjoan42.wordpress.com/2015/11/29/living-the-dream/) is about my first time on stage. Not familiar with “clerihew” (is it a form?) but will check it out.

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      • Just Joan May 13, 2018 / 11:49 am

        Here’s a little “clerihew” written just for you:

        The scholar with an MFA
        who hasn’t anything to say
        is less a poet than the teen
        whose pen is poised and insight keen

        Keep observing, thinking, questioning, and moving that quill (or MacBook). You have a poetic gift, AnaCrazy! 🙂

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      • Anacrazyfuturewriter May 13, 2018 / 11:56 am

        Oh my god I love this so much Joan!! Thank you!! This means the world to me
        P.S. Your Clerihew is beautiful but entirely untrue

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